After showing my animatic, I was advised to make certain corrections and improvements in terms of shots and camera compostion. It was suggested to me that the dream sequences be treated differently from those depicting reality, unless it was my intention to keep the sequences ambiguous until the end.
Once again I was asked to consider adding some more information about the character of the girl, in the form of descriptive sequences, either in the beginning or an exposition towards the end.
During this meeting I also exhibited some of the background scores and effects, and was asked to show a complete final draft of the animatic that included the changes suggested beforehand, along with the audio aspects.
In conclusion, we agreed that I would deliver a final version of the animatic at the next meeting, approving which, I would begin production of the film. This animatic, so to speak, would be more “descriptive” than the usual animatic, incorporating the ‘key’ drawings which would then be used during animation.
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Wednesday, 22 September 2010
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PART ONE
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of a girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
PART TWO
Inside the bus at the airport.
SFx:
1.Closing of bus door
2.Ominous Background Score
The door hisses shut as he stands alone, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
A man stands nearby, appearing to look at him.
He looks back, nervously.
They exchange looks, and with each glance he gets more nervous.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away.
The dark shapes begin to gather closer together while he looks from them towards the parked airplane.
SFx:
1.Opening of bus door
2.Starting of aircraft engine
PART THREE
Inside the airplane.
Sfx:
1.Aircraft Ambience
He sits in the window seat, fiddling with his seatbelt. (Metallic sound)
He bites his lip, frowns and turns to look at a passenger seated near him.
Cue Score.
The passenger has just picked up a packet of nuts, which he now rips open. (Ripping plastic packet sound)
He shuts his eyes forcibly. (Single frame shot showing maggots crawling around in decomposing food?)
The man begins to pour some nuts into his hand. (Plastic packet sound)
He clenches his fist tightly.
The man puts some nuts into his mouth and begins to chew. (Chewing sounds)
He winces.
Close up on the passenger’s mouth chewing loudly, completely oblivious. The mouth begins to appear grotesque (long teeth, forked tongue?)
Close up on his eyes shifting back and forth rapidly.
He turns to look ahead, visibly troubled.
Scratching sound heard.
Another passenger scratches his face behind him. (Scratching sounds)
He turns his face to look at the source of the noise from the corner of his eye.
Man continues to scratch, getting louder. His nails appear to be long and claw-like.
He loosens his tie, and gulps.
The passenger’s face now appears to be pale and white, visibly scaring him.
He shuts his eyes tightly, opens them and reaches into his pocket.
He takes out a plastic vial and taps out a few pills into his hand.
He swallows some and shuts his eyes.
PART FOUR
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of the girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
He looks down at his hands.
He is horrified at the claw-like nails and the pale white hands he sees.
He turns away, looking at the window.
The reflection of his face is grotesque, his mouth much like that of the passenger that was eating next to him.
He wakes up with a start back in the airplane.
He looks out the window to watch the terminal coming closer.
PART FIVE
Inside the airport.
The girl awaits his arrival.
She spots him and smiles.
He smiles back at her.
They hug each other.
The two are seen leaving the airport together.
PART SIX
Inside another bus.
The girl and he sit next to each other.
She smiles at him.
He smiles back.
She touches his cheek.
He continues to look at her.
Another passenger looks in their direction, rather puzzled.
She sits in her seat, reaching out into thin air, smiling.
The seat next to hers is empty.
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of a girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
PART TWO
Inside the bus at the airport.
SFx:
1.Closing of bus door
2.Ominous Background Score
The door hisses shut as he stands alone, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
A man stands nearby, appearing to look at him.
He looks back, nervously.
They exchange looks, and with each glance he gets more nervous.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away.
The dark shapes begin to gather closer together while he looks from them towards the parked airplane.
SFx:
1.Opening of bus door
2.Starting of aircraft engine
PART THREE
Inside the airplane.
Sfx:
1.Aircraft Ambience
He sits in the window seat, fiddling with his seatbelt. (Metallic sound)
He bites his lip, frowns and turns to look at a passenger seated near him.
Cue Score.
The passenger has just picked up a packet of nuts, which he now rips open. (Ripping plastic packet sound)
He shuts his eyes forcibly. (Single frame shot showing maggots crawling around in decomposing food?)
The man begins to pour some nuts into his hand. (Plastic packet sound)
He clenches his fist tightly.
The man puts some nuts into his mouth and begins to chew. (Chewing sounds)
He winces.
Close up on the passenger’s mouth chewing loudly, completely oblivious. The mouth begins to appear grotesque (long teeth, forked tongue?)
Close up on his eyes shifting back and forth rapidly.
He turns to look ahead, visibly troubled.
Scratching sound heard.
Another passenger scratches his face behind him. (Scratching sounds)
He turns his face to look at the source of the noise from the corner of his eye.
Man continues to scratch, getting louder. His nails appear to be long and claw-like.
He loosens his tie, and gulps.
The passenger’s face now appears to be pale and white, visibly scaring him.
He shuts his eyes tightly, opens them and reaches into his pocket.
He takes out a plastic vial and taps out a few pills into his hand.
He swallows some and shuts his eyes.
PART FOUR
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of the girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
He looks down at his hands.
He is horrified at the claw-like nails and the pale white hands he sees.
He turns away, looking at the window.
The reflection of his face is grotesque, his mouth much like that of the passenger that was eating next to him.
He wakes up with a start back in the airplane.
He looks out the window to watch the terminal coming closer.
PART FIVE
Inside the airport.
The girl awaits his arrival.
She spots him and smiles.
He smiles back at her.
They hug each other.
The two are seen leaving the airport together.
PART SIX
Inside another bus.
The girl and he sit next to each other.
She smiles at him.
He smiles back.
She touches his cheek.
He continues to look at her.
Another passenger looks in their direction, rather puzzled.
She sits in her seat, reaching out into thin air, smiling.
The seat next to hers is empty.
Fourth Panel Meeting held on 19th Aug, 2010
During this review I was asked to present the finished Animatics with audio but unfortunately due to a major hard drive failure, I was unable to present the animatics.
Owing to this rather unfortunate mishap I had to redraw many of my storyboard frames on paper to show at the meeting.
I was informed that after looking at the storyboard thumbnails that my narratives still lacked more detail and I need to work on the treatment of many sequences. The panel felt that I had not changed much of the original storyline, instead just adding a twist towards the end, and changing the point of view to another character altogether. They expressed their doubts that this twist would work because the bulk of the narrative is built around the central figure of the man.
Owing to this rather unfortunate mishap I had to redraw many of my storyboard frames on paper to show at the meeting.
I was informed that after looking at the storyboard thumbnails that my narratives still lacked more detail and I need to work on the treatment of many sequences. The panel felt that I had not changed much of the original storyline, instead just adding a twist towards the end, and changing the point of view to another character altogether. They expressed their doubts that this twist would work because the bulk of the narrative is built around the central figure of the man.
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