PART ONE
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of a girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
PART TWO
Inside the bus at the airport.
SFx:
1.Closing of bus door
2.Ominous Background Score
The door hisses shut as he stands alone, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
A man stands nearby, appearing to look at him.
He looks back, nervously.
They exchange looks, and with each glance he gets more nervous.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away.
The dark shapes begin to gather closer together while he looks from them towards the parked airplane.
SFx:
1.Opening of bus door
2.Starting of aircraft engine
PART THREE
Inside the airplane.
Sfx:
1.Aircraft Ambience
He sits in the window seat, fiddling with his seatbelt. (Metallic sound)
He bites his lip, frowns and turns to look at a passenger seated near him.
Cue Score.
The passenger has just picked up a packet of nuts, which he now rips open. (Ripping plastic packet sound)
He shuts his eyes forcibly. (Single frame shot showing maggots crawling around in decomposing food?)
The man begins to pour some nuts into his hand. (Plastic packet sound)
He clenches his fist tightly.
The man puts some nuts into his mouth and begins to chew. (Chewing sounds)
He winces.
Close up on the passenger’s mouth chewing loudly, completely oblivious. The mouth begins to appear grotesque (long teeth, forked tongue?)
Close up on his eyes shifting back and forth rapidly.
He turns to look ahead, visibly troubled.
Scratching sound heard.
Another passenger scratches his face behind him. (Scratching sounds)
He turns his face to look at the source of the noise from the corner of his eye.
Man continues to scratch, getting louder. His nails appear to be long and claw-like.
He loosens his tie, and gulps.
The passenger’s face now appears to be pale and white, visibly scaring him.
He shuts his eyes tightly, opens them and reaches into his pocket.
He takes out a plastic vial and taps out a few pills into his hand.
He swallows some and shuts his eyes.
PART FOUR
Inside the bus.
He stands all alone in the bus.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
As he turns to look one way, he spots the figure of the girl watching him from one end of the bus.
Inside the airplane.
He sits all alone in the plane.
He looks puzzled, almost like he doesn’t know how or why he got there.
Once again the figure of the girl watches him from a distance.
He looks down at his hands.
He is horrified at the claw-like nails and the pale white hands he sees.
He turns away, looking at the window.
The reflection of his face is grotesque, his mouth much like that of the passenger that was eating next to him.
He wakes up with a start back in the airplane.
He looks out the window to watch the terminal coming closer.
PART FIVE
Inside the airport.
The girl awaits his arrival.
She spots him and smiles.
He smiles back at her.
They hug each other.
The two are seen leaving the airport together.
PART SIX
Inside another bus.
The girl and he sit next to each other.
She smiles at him.
He smiles back.
She touches his cheek.
He continues to look at her.
Another passenger looks in their direction, rather puzzled.
She sits in her seat, reaching out into thin air, smiling.
The seat next to hers is empty.
Monday, 6 September 2010
Fourth Panel Meeting held on 19th Aug, 2010
During this review I was asked to present the finished Animatics with audio but unfortunately due to a major hard drive failure, I was unable to present the animatics.
Owing to this rather unfortunate mishap I had to redraw many of my storyboard frames on paper to show at the meeting.
I was informed that after looking at the storyboard thumbnails that my narratives still lacked more detail and I need to work on the treatment of many sequences. The panel felt that I had not changed much of the original storyline, instead just adding a twist towards the end, and changing the point of view to another character altogether. They expressed their doubts that this twist would work because the bulk of the narrative is built around the central figure of the man.
Owing to this rather unfortunate mishap I had to redraw many of my storyboard frames on paper to show at the meeting.
I was informed that after looking at the storyboard thumbnails that my narratives still lacked more detail and I need to work on the treatment of many sequences. The panel felt that I had not changed much of the original storyline, instead just adding a twist towards the end, and changing the point of view to another character altogether. They expressed their doubts that this twist would work because the bulk of the narrative is built around the central figure of the man.
Third Panel Review held on 10th Aug, 2010
I was advised to look closely at the narrative, bringing it more clearly without getting lost in translating the script into visual elements.
The panel felt that I need to communicate the story better, and in spite of it being a good idea, it runs the risk of losing meaning and emphasis.
They were concerned that the narrative does talks about the main character’s paranoia/hallucination but it does not gives much impact over the main character. This might need explanation during viewing this as a film.
I was then asked to begin work on a preliminary storyboard and animatic so that they could see what the film might feel like.
In conclusion, the panel wanted to see a complete storyboard at the next review.
The panel felt that I need to communicate the story better, and in spite of it being a good idea, it runs the risk of losing meaning and emphasis.
They were concerned that the narrative does talks about the main character’s paranoia/hallucination but it does not gives much impact over the main character. This might need explanation during viewing this as a film.
I was then asked to begin work on a preliminary storyboard and animatic so that they could see what the film might feel like.
In conclusion, the panel wanted to see a complete storyboard at the next review.
Script_Update
Part One
Inside the bus at the airport.
SFx:
1.Closing of bus door
2.Ominous Background Score
The door hisses shut as he stands alone, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away from them.
The dark shapes begin to gather closer together while he looks from them towards the parked airplane.
SFx:
1.Opening of bus door
2.Starting of aircraft engine
30 seconds approx.
Part Two
Inside the airplane.
Sfx:
1.Aircraft Ambience
He sits in the window seat, fiddling with his seatbelt. (Metallic sound)
He bites his lip, frowns and turns to look at a passenger seated near him.
Cue Score.
The passenger has just picked up a packet of nuts, which he now rips open. (Ripping plastic packet sound)
He shuts his eyes forcibly. (Single frame shot showing maggots crawling around in decomposing food?)
The man begins to pour some nuts into his hand. (Plastic packet sound)
He clenches his fist tightly.
The man puts some nuts into his mouth and begins to chew. (Chewing sounds)
He winces.
Close up on the passenger’s mouth chewing loudly, completely oblivious. The mouth begins to appear demonic almost (long teeth, forked tongue?)
Close up on his eyes shifting back and forth rapidly.
He turns to look ahead, visibly troubled.
Scratching sound heard.
Another passenger scratches his face behind him. (Scratching sounds)
He turns his face to look at the source of the noise from the corner of his eye.
Man continues to scratch, getting louder. His nails appear to be long and claw-like.
He loosens his tie, and gulps.
The passenger’s face now appears to be pale and white, visibly scaring him.
He shuts his eyes tightly, opens them and reaches into his pocket.
He takes out a plastic vial and taps out a few pills into his hand.
He swallows some and shuts his eyes.
Part Three
Outside the airplane.
The skies around the plane are filled with clouds.
The clouds morph into dragon-like creatures that fly around the plane, first playfully, then with more animosity.
Their expressions suddenly change from happy to evil and they attack the aircraft.
The aircraft lurches and the engines are heard failing.
He wakes up with a start.
He heaves a sigh of relief as he realises it was just a dream.
Part Four
Inside the airport.
A girl awaits his arrival.
She spots him and smiles.
He smiles back at her.
They hug each other.
The two are seen leaving the airport together.
Part Five
Inside the bus.
He stands next to her in the bus, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away from them.
The girl looks at him.
He looks back at her, his expression still fearful.
She takes his hand.
He looks down at his hand in hers.
He looks calmer now, although still afraid.
The silhouettes gather closer together.
Inside the bus at the airport.
SFx:
1.Closing of bus door
2.Ominous Background Score
The door hisses shut as he stands alone, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away from them.
The dark shapes begin to gather closer together while he looks from them towards the parked airplane.
SFx:
1.Opening of bus door
2.Starting of aircraft engine
30 seconds approx.
Part Two
Inside the airplane.
Sfx:
1.Aircraft Ambience
He sits in the window seat, fiddling with his seatbelt. (Metallic sound)
He bites his lip, frowns and turns to look at a passenger seated near him.
Cue Score.
The passenger has just picked up a packet of nuts, which he now rips open. (Ripping plastic packet sound)
He shuts his eyes forcibly. (Single frame shot showing maggots crawling around in decomposing food?)
The man begins to pour some nuts into his hand. (Plastic packet sound)
He clenches his fist tightly.
The man puts some nuts into his mouth and begins to chew. (Chewing sounds)
He winces.
Close up on the passenger’s mouth chewing loudly, completely oblivious. The mouth begins to appear demonic almost (long teeth, forked tongue?)
Close up on his eyes shifting back and forth rapidly.
He turns to look ahead, visibly troubled.
Scratching sound heard.
Another passenger scratches his face behind him. (Scratching sounds)
He turns his face to look at the source of the noise from the corner of his eye.
Man continues to scratch, getting louder. His nails appear to be long and claw-like.
He loosens his tie, and gulps.
The passenger’s face now appears to be pale and white, visibly scaring him.
He shuts his eyes tightly, opens them and reaches into his pocket.
He takes out a plastic vial and taps out a few pills into his hand.
He swallows some and shuts his eyes.
Part Three
Outside the airplane.
The skies around the plane are filled with clouds.
The clouds morph into dragon-like creatures that fly around the plane, first playfully, then with more animosity.
Their expressions suddenly change from happy to evil and they attack the aircraft.
The aircraft lurches and the engines are heard failing.
He wakes up with a start.
He heaves a sigh of relief as he realises it was just a dream.
Part Four
Inside the airport.
A girl awaits his arrival.
She spots him and smiles.
He smiles back at her.
They hug each other.
The two are seen leaving the airport together.
Part Five
Inside the bus.
He stands next to her in the bus, surrounded by dark silhouettes.
He looks over his shoulder towards the back of the bus.
He is greeted by darkness. The silhouettes shift in shape slightly.
He appears to be afraid, gulps slowly and shrinks away from them.
The girl looks at him.
He looks back at her, his expression still fearful.
She takes his hand.
He looks down at his hand in hers.
He looks calmer now, although still afraid.
The silhouettes gather closer together.
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